The blue green apparition floated through the open door and came to a stop, hovering over Jesse's bed. Jesse opened one eye, pointed to the only chair in the room and said calmly, "welcome...take a seat."
The specter hesitated, and then other specters slowly materialized right by the chair. With the same tone, Jesse said, "take a seat...right next to the bank robber I shot, right next to the innocent bystander that was run over during a car chase, and right next to my partner who couldn't take all the madness that came with this job, and ate a bullet from his own gun.
"I've made peace with all of my ghosts a long time ago, though they'll never let me know a moment of peace." Jesse tugged the covers up to his neck and said "but know this; I've never missed a night...or a minute of sleep in all of my life."
Note, count the number of sentences and that will tell you who passed on this short without comment.
6 comments:
Whew. That was short and intense.
Bubs,
Er, I'd better not say the comment I was going to go with, lest I incur the wrath of The Missus.
that's fucked up.
two way phrase... in the excellent way 'cause it's excellent.
in the bad way 'cause it's wrong that is happening.
Quin,
It's f'd in the sense that I don't see why he couldn't have included it.
"two way phrase... in the excellent way 'cause it's excellent. in the bad way 'cause it's wrong that is happening."
Thank ya.
you know, i've submitted my last one.
i love him to death, he gave me my first praise... but, enough is enough.
*sigh*
Quin,
I don't think you should deprive your public and you are certainly the only reason I even venture over to the site. I wouldn't be surprised if I was the only one who had a similar experience, yet all personal feelings aside, still looked forward to your next submission.
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